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In some countries worldwide, men and women have children at a later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

In some countries worldwide, men and women have children at a later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

The tendency of late giving birth is increasing among some couples in many countries because of some possible reasons such as financial matters. And if this phenomenon continues, it may pose some disadvantages involving high gap between generation in the families or the decrease of young population in society.

Initially, the main reason why men and women want to have children in a later age is that they may prioritize their career rather than take care of children. Some young couples tend to invest their time into their career before giving birth. Because when they are young, they will have time and strong enough to study, work to gain-in depth in a given field. They may desire to have a stable finance before having a baby. This will ensure a good life to their children later.

However, if the age of fertility is later than the past, it can pose some problems such as the gap between generations and the ageing population in society. First, giving birth at late age will lead to the bigger gap between parents's age and their children. So, those parents will feel tough and have not enough strength to take good care of their children. Contrastly, when the parents become older, their children are still too young to look after them.The young child may feel heavy pressure to their parents. Moreover, the later couples having baby, the fewers baby they can bear. Then one couple may confront with choosing to have only one child to nourish. This will conditionally lead to the reduction of population in society

To include, some people choose have children later than the past because of their concentration on career to raise their children. But it can have an impact on the gap of age between parents and children or the decrease of population in society.


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  1. "The tendency of late giving birth" -> "The trend of delayed childbirth"
    Explanation: "The trend of delayed childbirth" is a more precise and formal term that accurately describes the phenomenon being discussed, enhancing the academic tone of the sentence.

  2. "some possible reasons such as financial matters" -> "several possible reasons, including financial considerations"
    Explanation: "Several possible reasons, including financial considerations" is more specific and formal, avoiding the vagueness of "some possible reasons such as financial matters."

  3. "it may pose some disadvantages" -> "it may entail certain disadvantages"
    Explanation: "Entail" is a more formal and precise verb than "pose," which is somewhat vague and less commonly used in academic writing.

  4. "high gap between generation" -> "significant generational gap"
    Explanation: "Significant generational gap" is a more precise and formal expression, improving the clarity and specificity of the phrase.

  5. "the decrease of young population" -> "a decline in the youth population"
    Explanation: "A decline in the youth population" is more specific and formal, avoiding the vague "the decrease of young population."

  6. "men and women want to have children" -> "individuals choose to have children"
    Explanation: "Individuals choose to have children" is more neutral and inclusive, avoiding the gender-specific "men and women," which is less appropriate in formal academic writing.

  7. "take care of children" -> "care for their children"
    Explanation: "Care for their children" is a more formal and precise phrase, suitable for academic writing.

  8. "invest their time into their career" -> "devote their time to their careers"
    Explanation: "Devote their time to their careers" is a more formal and academically appropriate phrase, enhancing the professionalism of the sentence.

  9. "gain-in depth in a given field" -> "gain depth in a specific field"
    Explanation: "Gain depth in a specific field" corrects the grammatical error and uses more precise language, improving the formality and clarity of the sentence.

  10. "have a stable finance" -> "achieve financial stability"
    Explanation: "Achieve financial stability" is a more formal and precise expression, suitable for academic writing.

  11. "the bigger gap between parents’s age" -> "a greater age gap between parents"
    Explanation: "A greater age gap between parents" corrects the possessive error and uses more formal language, enhancing the academic tone.

  12. "feel tough and have not enough strength" -> "feel challenged and lack sufficient strength"
    Explanation: "Feel challenged and lack sufficient strength" is more precise and formal, avoiding the colloquial "feel tough" and "have not enough strength."

  13. "the fewers baby they can bear" -> "fewer babies they can bear"
    Explanation: Corrects the grammatical error "fewers" to "fewer," which is the correct form for uncountable nouns like "babies."

  14. "conditionally lead to the reduction of population" -> "potentially lead to a reduction in population"
    Explanation: "Potentially lead to a reduction in population" is more precise and formal, improving the academic tone and clarity of the sentence.

  15. "choose have children later than the past" -> "choose to have children later than in the past"
    Explanation: "Choose to have children later than in the past" corrects the grammatical structure and adds clarity to the sentence, aligning with formal academic style.

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