Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It would be argued by some that the most effective method to enhance community health is by increasing the quantity of sport amenities. In my opinion, however, this activity alone would not be enough to make an impact on our social health and public health education might be a better solution.
On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that more sports facilities should be constructed to improve public health. The first reason is that the expansion of sports amenities would give the citizens more opportunities to engage in a variety of distinct sports clubs or classes such as yoga clubs, dancing classes or table tennis clubs… As a result, they could enhance their personal health. Moreover, people could easily choose their own favorite sport which suited with their personality, age, physical health, or even their budget thanks to the increase in distinct of sports facilities. Take my family as an example, while my father is very interested in playing golf, I feel this sport is quite boring compared to another sports like soccer or tennis.
On the other hand, I would argue that the most decisive element of doing exercise is not dependent on the numerous sports amenities. Instead, the awareness of the public in improving their own health is the most essential factor. For example, when a child understands about the adverse effects of tabaco, he or she would be less likely to smoke in the future. Consequently, Public campaigns and health protection programs need to be increased to equip the citizens with sufficient knowledge about protecting their health effective and avoiding from other health potential problems.
In conclusion, although some people think that the best method to enhance social health is the increase in the number of sports amenities, I personally believe that health awareness education is the most decisive factor in improving the citizens health.

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