Some people think that full-time undergraduates not only spend a vast amount of time studying but also do more extracurricular activities. I completely agree with the above opinion. In modern and developing society at present, education level is the most important thing which decides your future career. For example, if you want to get a job in a large enterprise or a multinational company, your profile must be perfect with good performance and high scores throughout the study. So, university students spend almost their time learning at regular classes and extra classes, to ensure their future. However, is studying too much really good? According to some documents, overstudy could lead to many serious mental problems such as depression, anxiety and contributing to decline in their social issues. In my opinion, university students should spend more time on entertaining activities, for example, jogging, going to the cinema or somewhere with friends, ect. Those activities make them more active and positive, full-charging energy after stressful lessons. In conclusion, students should spend more time to enjoy their hobbies instead of study too much, and i completely agree with that view.

Some people think that full-time undergraduates not only spend a vast amount of time studying but also do more extracurricular activities. I completely agree with the above opinion.

In modern and developing society at present, education level is the most important thing which decides your future career. For example, if you want to get a job in a large enterprise or a multinational company, your profile must be perfect with good performance and high scores throughout the study. So, university students spend almost their time
learning at regular classes and extra classes, to ensure their future.

However, is studying too much really good? According to some documents, overstudy could lead to many serious mental problems such as depression, anxiety and contributing to decline in their social issues. In my opinion, university students should spend more time on entertaining activities, for example, jogging, going to the cinema or somewhere with friends, ect. Those activities make them more active and positive, full-charging energy after stressful lessons.

In conclusion, students should spend more time to enjoy their hobbies instead of study too much, and i completely agree with that view.

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