There are those who consider work to be the paramount aspect of life, suggesting that without career success, life loses its meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are those who consider work to be the paramount aspect of life, suggesting that without career success, life loses its meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people would say: "Without career success, life loses its meaning, I partially agree with the statement. Let's go into details.
We are living in a growth-era of the economy when everything is money-matter. For example: I want have a shaped body which make me happy about myself. Then I need to register for gym membership which I must pay $50 monthly. Another example: I want my kids can go to the top-education schools. Then I need pay tuition. Those examples show that what makes people happy and enjoy life must come with a cost. The money will associate with the career. The higher the position, the higher the salary and more happiness.
However, some people may find a way not to involve career with their living meaning. An volunteer in Africa may not having success career but helping children in Africa which make he/she happy. A monk may not have a big salary, but helping people awaken make him happy.
In conclusion, successful career is not away the goal of life. What people do make them understand the meaning of their existence is the matter.

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