The given picture shows the process of making electricity from coal. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given picture shows the process of making electricity from coal. Summarise the
information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
relevant.
The picture depicts the circulation steps of creating electricity from coal. Overall, the process can be divided into 9 steps. Starting with mining coal and ending with delivering electricity to residents.
In the first stage, people collect coal from mines by digging and then people will use the crush machine to crush it. After crushing coal into pieces, The coal will be arranged in the controlley and will be delivered to the first factory by trucks. where the pieces of coal will be gasified to prepare for the next step.
Turning to the next step, after being gasified the coal is continually delivered to the gas factory and being cooled by the cooler machine. Before delivering electricity to residents, the coal will be stopped at the gas power plant to do the final step. At the final step, Gas will be turned into electricity. Finally, the electricity will be delivered to houses and industries for essential needs.
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Band điểm Task Achivement ước lượng: 6
Band Score: 6
Explanation: The essay provides an overview of the process of making electricity from coal. It identifies the main stages of the process and presents them in a logical order. However, the essay does not fully satisfy all the requirements of the task. It does not adequately highlight the key features of the process, such as the use of a gasifier to convert coal into gas, or the role of the cooler in the process. The essay also includes some irrelevant details, such as the mention of "controlley" and "gas factory."
How to improve: The essay could be improved by focusing more on the key features of the process and by providing more specific details about each stage. The essay could also be made more concise by removing irrelevant details. For example, the essay could be improved by stating that "coal is gasified to produce gas" rather than saying "the pieces of coal will be gasified to prepare for the next step."
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