The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003

The graph below shows the average retirement age of males and females in six countries in 2003

The society would benefit from a ban on all form of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can be damaging. Do you agree or disagree.

The society would benefit from a ban on all form of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can be damaging. I partly agree with that of view.

On the one hand, there are numerous reasons why some people believe that advertising is harmful to society. Firstly, advertisements annoy users, when you access many programs entertainment like YouTube, Facebook and TikTok … but appeared many advertising program, it makes you feel annoyed and uncomfortable. Secondly, advertisements have a plethora of offenses, many parents allows the kids use mobile phones but can not control what children watch. As a result, advertisements become more hostile to users.

On the other hand, I believe that advertisements should be limited. The first reason is that advertisements help people know about household and personal items, this is because selling online is more and more common in the world, it helps people order many things but individuals spend time going out. Another reason, there are many apps specifically for children appearing so many parents can control watch limit their kid’s watching, for example, YouTube Kids.

In conclusion, while it can be that some individuals hold a believe should ban advertisement because i serves no useful purpose, and can be damaging. I am of the opinion that advertisements have plenty of advantages.

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